My Cry

love this poem!! great job!! keep it up!! take care!! *5* :)

a good poem but one suggestion and remember this is a just a suggestion you don't have to do it ....
the line

Where were you those cold winter nights
Where were you when my heart was so tight

well i think it would sound better if it was

Where were you those cold winter nights
Where were you when my heart could no longer fight

but other than that i like it a lot
escpially this part

Where were your hands
when I was falling so hard,

good job keep writing

i really enjoy your writting its really good...keep writing your great...~sherrie~

Another wonderful peice you have here. This part was definatly the best:

You were always a shadow
a vision but never there
Your words were all whispers
never loud enough to hear
Every moment I stopped
to gaze into your eyes
Your emotions still lingered
hardly feeling my cries

The whole poem was GREAT. Keep it up! 5/5

-Cheerfully Cynical-

P.S. Okay, youve convinced me! You are definatly going on my favorite's list. :]

This is the 2nd poem i have read of yours and its just great... I like this one just as much as the poem you wrote "UNTOUCHED" good job... you could go some where with your poems!!!!!!! your going to be fame!