by unknown Jan 11, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
In the making of a scene so wrong, a vivid absence.. |
by cac123
I sort of agree with erica, the lines didnt really flow together, but it was a powerful poem, it really touched me. |
by unknown
thank you for the comments and Erica i will take your advice into account its nice to get truthful feedback so i can improve on my poetic skill and know when I’m doing wrong.. thank you to all who commented :D And i know some did like this poem so i will also take you comment into account and continue writing this way :P |
I like the concept. But the lines just don't flow. I don't know it could just be my idiot self. Haha. Nice work on the concept though. |
by Luke
me liked it. good luck with it. -Luke |