A Hopeless Suicide

I must admit, I'm not a believer in God, so this poem is a little out of place for me to comment on, but I seemed to enjoy it. Your stanzas are beautiful, and they all flow together really well. I like how you repeated the word "weave" in the first 3 stanzas, it was good use of repetition. I really admire the first stanza ... it set the mood of the poem extremely well. Loved it...

I would guess that you wrote songs as well?

The way you separate the versus, hoping that the reader tries to read it through without stopping, so to capture its depth/message.

I enjoyed your message.

I liked your message and I do have praise for this piece but U have to after the stance,
"Leave your shelter
With sanity around
Walk to the cliff side
And stare at the ground"
I thought it got pretty weak. The emotional dcepth and symbols you used after that stance weren't as intriguing and poetic as the beginning.

HOWEVER
I absolutly loved how you chose to format and symbolize this piece. The repeating, "weave" I thought was an excellent choice of symbolism and your metaphors and comparisons were really powerful and intriguing. I also liked your message, worthy and beautiful concept to write off of. I really admire the stance,
"Weave a glove
Of twigs and thorn
To fit your mind
You can adorn"
Again I just love your choice of symbolism and imagery. It really creates an impact of emotion on the reader of understandning and appreciation for the main subject.

So, even though I thought it could have been better, Overall I though it was very well written and you have beautiful words.
Lovely job

What an entrancing poem!!! Even though the words you have chosen are simple, they weave intricate images in my mind while reading this. I'm not the one to give such praise and flattery, but this one deserves it!

This is a wonderful poem, vivacious even as it is melancholic, inspiring even as it is self-deprecative, poignant and wise. Once again, a truly wonderful poem.

And as an aside, I was extremely happy to see Jason McDowell lives again. :)