No it's really good took me twice to understand it but now I do.. very good job as usual

i can think of many stories that can be depicted with these short lines. it's amazing how poetry can be so enigmatic at times. i really liked this piece. take care:)

so simple and easy to understand, keep it up, you go girl

very simple...But so deep...Great work babe !!! Take care,
E.

its ok im sure your other works better but nah it has its own special quality 2 it..... i like it all the same