wow, allie, u sure as hell beat me on this poetry stuff, u can write about ANYTHING, greeat job
Lots of love! *missing you*
Samz~*

Interesting. Not the usual flare -- not to be offensive -- but still a clear & touching poem.

The opening stanza is interestingly enough, very griping. The idea of a heavy sleep seems to consume the audience. The second stanza is so bright & ironically tumultuous. -- The idea of saving, as in, perhaps, the Christian salvation, and you say: "if you wanted to"

A really delightful piece. Hats off to you.

5/5