awww, very sweet poem! :)

It is pretty good, I would just work to avoid common rhymes, and to make sure that you keep the lines in a certain syllable range, like lets say 5-8 syllables per line, to make the poem have a more standardized rhythm so that reading it will be easier and more interesting.

hey, this is a great poem. raw emotions and its sweet :) i like. thanks for commenting on mine