Great job. I love the language you use, it really adds this atmosphere of a different world to the reader elping them to understand the speech and text.
I also love how you worded the lines. The symbols you used really expressed the emotion you were trying to ring out and it definetlly worked.
I especially admired the lines,
"Very well...blood against blood, lives of all companionable hate.
Should it break me whilst I’m already undone....
So be it."
There was so much beautiful meaning behind those symbols. I loved the whole piece, great job