wow great poem its so deep and flowing but it could hav been set out a lil better but still a 5 for u!

This is excellent !
im touched...
neat poem
very deep & lonely !!
love
amy
ps:do read my poems too

Yeah your great i wish i could write like this. weird form again which kinda throws the flow of but i love the points and ideas you create so much it dosnt even matter like it matters but the intelligence it musta taken to think of stuff like the first line kinda overrides the lack of a format and what not. so yeah your awesome....the first few lines were my favorite the last reminded me of that evanescence song lol but yes great job definatly 5/5!

This was really good. I loved the ending. Very sad. Good job. And thank you for the comment on my poem. I really appreciated it. By the way, you don't enter the contest. The administrator of the site chooses the winners.

Great wording and the story behind the words was very deep....5/5

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Well I do relate. A lot.

There is a point to wishing though. You shouldn't be totally naive about your wishes and optimism, but some wishes and dreams do come true. Mostly when you put forth the effort...

"What’s the point of smiling, when deep inside you’re dying, crying, wishing you were dead."

^I think it would be better to replace "dying" with another word like "fading" or "withering" because you use the word "dead" shortly after...

So many people have the sort of thoughts you put in here...which is so sad... there are always people who care...even when you don't realize or believe it.

The end reminds me of an Evanescence song. The part, "Save me from the nothing I’ve become."

Oh, man, I hope you don't really or still feel this way. I mean at times these thoughts creep up, but I hope you believe in better and hope for the future.

There is a point! And you won't always be let down. There will be good times too. I hope you already know all that, but I thought I'd tell you anyway.

Love it! Spectacular job. Easily relatable.

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Your Metaphors Were Powerful, Yet Some Didn't Make Any Sense To Me At All, The Poem Overall Was Beautiful But It Was Hard To Read It....You Should Have Chosen a Diffrent Format So The Poem Could Have Stood Out More....It Was Really Good xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Very well written poem, it sounds true to me lol! Oh and can you comment on some of mine too?? please and thank you! :D