I personally like this poem- but please give honest feeback.
Not too sure about my first stanza though, I think that needs much work, it just gives it imagination.

I love this. you have no idea how much I relate to it, I completly appreciate and admire it.

i love your choice of symbols and the imagery you protrayed throughout the piece. It was complete dark beauty, every symbol was delicatly written to fit the main object and I love hwo you worded it.
i really admire the main idea, the fact of a "masked girl" portrays so much defined meaning into this story it creates a tragic and painful outline.
I especially admire the lines,
"Crimson eyes with blackened cheeks
A porcelain dolls glossy face;
Lips that shy of one petite smile
A mask of incensed hate."
I absolutly LOVE those lines, they are incredibly beautiful and dark.
*excellent job

love the descriptions .... great job

I don't know what you're talking about. I like it all. Would, "On her own AS the wind blows" sound better? Seems to fit.

Thanks Shojo- I will definetely change that word, it makes perfect sense as 'as'!