WOW...you know this was such a sad poem but you wrote it beautifully. I can see your emotion in every word, keep yah head up and smile, life gets hard but without the hard times it would be too easy to call life. GREAT poem.
take care always
Scooby
5/5

i really liked this piece. The way you displayed the inner emotion through your technique of the repetion of, "...yet"
it brings tremendous forshadow and understanding to the poem.
I really admired your symbolism, and i really appreciated the lines,
"You haven’t got me yet
It hurts but my eyes are dry
You all stand so close, smiles staring hard
I’m not finished yet"
i love your comparisons and metaphors throughout the piece. Good job

aaaw, that was such an awesome poem! absolutely wicked,good work.

emma x

i agree with the inner motion idea. you did express alot in this one. good work
take care
-Allen