nice one u should be proud!
what are you sad about?
if you want to talk about you can email me i mite be able to help. you r very talented keep it up! im gonna keep checking ur poems.
good luck!
sammi

What i read of this one was disturbing
The visualization thing got to me So it was well writen.

So deep and emotional. bit creepy though! keep it up! :)

It was sad, deeply moving, and i had too keep reading it 5/5

great poem. The feelings and thoughts of the narrator were there, but the poem didn't sound like someone was just venting. Many poems like this on this site sound like a person is venting, but this one is great. The meaning hits everybody the way you wrote it.

This is a really great poem...Third line, last word bear, in this context, it's actually "bare" Bear is like, teddy or Polar...you get it...5/5 though...Great write!

nice 5/5 looking good so far

Amazing.Very emotional and great imagery,yet it was pretty graghic at some points.But that might be just because I don't usually read these poems.
Maybe you could consider stanza's?It would put more meaning in the words and it wouldn't seem so overwhelming when you first see it.
Beautiful piece,
A 5/5,
Keep writing,
Miranda