by ** JeNa ** Jan 25, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
What is happening here? |
by Minkus
I think that the flow of this was a bit choppy, and some of the rhymes were forced. Try writing without rhymes once of twice and see how it goes! |
by TrUtH hUrTs
wish this wasn't true |
oh that is so sweet its a beautiful poem filled with emotion and feeling put across really well with words into an excellent poem that flows really well! i love this poem its great 5/5 |
by polly
we all have to live in hope sweetie!!!! keep you chin up, another good poem!! and hope that he read it. |
by xRachelx
Aw very sad and touching poem. I really liked the rhyming in the first verse. Keep writing! |