its good, your just trying too hard to rhyme, you dont need to rhyme. its a sad topic. keep up the writing, i love it all

Oh, sweetie, this is a beautiful poem, it's so sad too. It brought tears to my eyes. I don't tihnk your writing in getting worse!
Keep up the good work, (lol)
xoxZoexox

Hey, this is really good, its sad and expressive, keep it up, I like all the poems I've read so I think I'll add you to my fav. list xxx