Absolutly amazing poem.. although it was very sad it was also very well written and very good to read I loved it 5

Well it was ok I particularly dont care for the repeatition of the words in each line but hey thats writers choice i didnt really get what your motive was I understand the ravages of this being and what hes done but it just seemed to miss the linking part this is only my opinon

Wow, I like this one alot, I like the way you repeated it, gave it a different twist xxx

that was a really great poem, u really have talent

wow brilliant poem very poetic i loved it! i dont have much time so i'll comment some more poems later like i said brilliant 5/5
bec xXx

I like the repitition thing you did but the poem is like...amazing. I cant stress the point enough. And the title fits is perfectly. 5!!!!

oh yea, your in my fav's now

The only thing I didn't like about this poem is the last line of this stanza:

In this dark dark nursery rhyme;
His dark dark mind
Undressed her dark dark body
Making his dark dark soul

"Making his dark dark soul" doesn't seem to make sense with the context of the rest of the stanza. Other than that it was great. I thought the repitition of dark and red was a very unique idea.

i have took upon your opinion, and has hense changed that line, so maybe it is more understandable 'with the context'. thanks

This was pretty good, I liked it.

That was really good, i'll r8 it a 5. pEACE