Society

Hah you are right. i love it. it makes me smile in a sickening way. society sucks these days. and your poem puts is fabulously. the style is different but affective and i would pick parts out that i liked but i would be recopying the entire poem. awesome job!

I really liked the use of vocab in this poem because it means that somebody finally doesn't want to stick to the everyday words we're used to. Plus it makes us think or *pulls out a dictionary*
For some reason I felt like I could feel a certain beat to the words almost like you can put a bit of music to them. The way you have the words organized made it all seem to fit into this one puzzle poem. I liked the short lines in between the long ones as well. It added a nice effect.

*Pulls out the dictionary*... Jacob...HUGE WORDS! lol I love it cause it expands my vocabulary and gets me tothink about the context and their meanings!

I loveeeeeee
Explosive Comatose
An addictive neurosis
Narcissism runs rampant

Brillant... I love it! lol keep it up! I'm so happy I read this cause I can see the change in your writing w00t lol sex-illent

Jenn

Stellar write
~HazE

cool poem. altho there were a few words i wasn quite sure of their meaning, i got your message and i think the same kinda things everyday. keep writing, ur poems r extraordinary.