wow this poem is really good for your first one! you should try writing more.
Good luck,
~Sarah~

Well its not my first erotica.... but its the first one that I have tried to not use a whole bunch of "vulgar" language and its the first one that is based on *love* rather than just *sex,* or maybe its the second. I think a while ago I may have written one, but anyway I was getting comments about how my other explicits turned people off because of the language, so I tried to tone it down.
Kaitlin Kristina

wow. I don't know what to say, but that was awesome all 3 parts. Keep up with the writing. I enjoy reading your poems. Keep up the good work.
Good Job. 5/5.

omg that was so good me and my boyfriend read that one together and i swear if my mom was not hear lord knows what might have happen

they were all great

lol, no none of my explicits are from any experiance... just so everyone knows.

Thou it was long, I must admit that I enjoyed the poem as a whole. At times it was detailed more than required. Especially the third one. But you have done a wonderful job. I observed that you have tried different type of explicit poems. Great work.
Love,
Trincy.

wow again. I'm impressed by all of these. Very real.

very erotic and visualizing as always,,,,keep up the good work and don't forget us little ppl wen u become famouse fro wat your do, you have real talent!
~sel

OMG gurl u killed this shit. It was off the chain. I swear to God dat shit is amazing!