Split

These words help me understand you.
I love the way it is written, rhymes and "flows".
I envy your ability.
..xx

This poem was alright but felt more like a narrative though your emotions are clear and blended with your words. My suggestion: Maybe go deeper with your descriptions.

You have great talent for expression.

If the truth be told,
I want you near.
But you being around,
Is my deepest fear.

Loved these lines. They really express the dilemma well.
Great job keep writing.

great poem! I really liked the
Tired awake,
And active sleeping.
My eyes can't cry,
But my heart is weeping

Your a great writer! Keep it up!

Very lovely poem. I thought that the last line "You'll be around till I go" was a little outside from the rest of the poem, but other than that, the poem was great.

~*~Christina~*~