Depth of Illusion

by Jacki   Jan 31, 2005


She danced in beauty,
throughout the night
the impressionable chill of the
starry night;
Her eyes twinkled bright
like a continuous painting of
delicate delight.
Swirled with gold and trimmed
with desire;
and so she nestled under the
slumbering tree
curled up in a ball with
Georgia O'Keeffe.
Waited for sun break to let
the lilies free.
And as her eyes closed feeling the
warmth from the sun; and the hush
of the wind, Picasso painted 'the dream'
and she waited until the moon licked the lake once more.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Kalika

    Excellent poem, very well written, and I thank you for the comment on mine, it means a lot to me......

    Kalika

  • 19 years ago

    by S

    good poem. gave u a 5. :)

  • 19 years ago

    by pinkalias

    I thought it was quite lovely, I loved your imagery and technique of the format. However, I didn't partake in your use of rhyming. Though I did enjoy the piece, alot of the rhym scheme seemed very cliche and overused-such as,"the impressionable chill of the
    starry night;
    Her eyes twinkled bright"
    I thought that was a line much too overused and unoriginal.
    I did though, truly admire the last few lines,
    "And as her eyes closed feeling the
    warmth from the sun; and the hush
    of the wind, Picasso painted 'the dream'
    and she waited until the moon licked the lake once more."
    I just thought those comparisons were spectacular and beautifully written. Especially the last line, I completly adore it.
    overall, Well done

  • 19 years ago

    by bianca

    Hey~
    great poem i really like it. Keep writing i love reading ur poems, they'er great.
    Bianca
    PK

  • 19 years ago

    by Amilo

    The rhyming was unqiue, and had a articulate effect on the poem itself. And like all of your poetry, it was beautiful and vivid. Well done.

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