The key to writing good non rhyming poetry is making sure it still reads as a poem and flows from line to line and from point to point. I think thats maybe what this poem is lacking. I see you are trying to prove a point and an original one at that. I do understand what you are saying but reading it, it is coming across as just a very long sentance. You need to make what you say stronger and keep the reader interested in what you're saying. I think that is the only problem, your poem lacks strength. But then again i do like the ending, it makes the reader feel the poem personally and think what they would do.
Keep writing, keep improving.

wow beautiful poem! its very creative and well written i really enjoyed it! >>5/5<<
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