omg, it's so perfect, I can't find a flaw... wonderful work hun, it's captivating.

emma x

WOW that was really good keep up the good work

..............Stunning.
Left me breathless, this is, fantastic.
Pure beauty what can I say to put in to words the superb atmosphere this created?
the symbols you used were horrific and graphic, thus adding a desired effect to the peice to portray the pain and sufferage taken upon the girl's form. One example of these lovely lines that I really admired,
"I tried looking into her eyes, but they were sealed around the rims
And I noticed stale, cold tears scattered around her eyelid brims"
It's so terribly painful it adds to the main object of the writing and really contributes to the pain inside the story.
I also liked how you wrote about the attempts to save the girl that all failed. That really portrayed the helplessness the girl was feeling, to sit there and not be able to redirect what was happening.
the last lines were absolutly beautiful, and left me breathless with the rest of the piece.
Dark and utterly lovely, excellent

Yet another amazing peice of work. I really liked this one, Reminds me of someone in a depressed state, not wanting to accept help, just lounging in self-pity, until it's too late. Take care, I loved this peice...