You

I think that this is my favourite poem by you. or at least one of them. I've said this a couple of times, but you really do have a way with words. keep writing!

Interesting . . . can't really say I liked it all that much - but each critic has their own individual opinion. . . The flow was good, except for the second line - take off the though from the end perhaps? And the structure was good, even with the repeated lines which took the power from the poem.

Peace. [Sole]

I think some stanza's had the impact taken away from them such as: you kill me and torture me. The two me's steal from each other as well as always writing but you'll never know it.

Word choice is important :)

5/5. You were already on my faves list, b/c I really enjoy your stuff! Good work!
Kris
BTW, I've already given you a nickname in my head. You're Jakey. Nope, you don't have a choice! lol!

Aww this is so sad. and so good. i can relate well to this.
thank you for your comment. i appreciate it a lot.
good poem again
lauren

((you're in my favorites XD))