i cant wait to hear wut the song would sound like it would probably be the #1 hit, it's really good

This is going to be all the more lovely when sung into tune. I cannot wait to hear this darling, it will be beautiful. the words are as usual lovely, and written in a state of darkness and beauty that portrays the inner depth of the writer. I especially admired the lines,
"Choking in cluttered air to lungs that don't in-take
Crawling over pieces of a shattered life that I felt break
Can't expand to let you in, can't contract to spit you out
Screaming at the top of my lungs, no escaping now"
Beautiful. Lovely job

it's honest, i like it. i've felt it. that's what makes a song good right? feeling it? it's something i would really like to hear put to music, the lyrics are wicked and will carry it. good stuff!