The Powered

The rhyming in this is awesome, it doesn't sound forced at all but also is not out of time or anything -well done!
Only improvemnet is the grammer in the first stanza, I think it should be 'and an ugly embrace.'

Wonderful simply, wonderful!!!

This poem is great. it's really different from what i am use to reading and it's nice getting the freshness out of it. nice job with vocabulary this poem just seems so peaceful and powerful in ways. wonderful job writing it.

~Jacklyn

P.S. with media beauty i don't know if you got a little wrong idea with the tattoos, but many did. I was kind of using the tattoo's as a mask for that certain man. I am not saying that everyone wears this mask if they got tattoos, but to the man in the poem his tattoo meant nothing to him so it was like fakeness writen on him.

This poem feels extremly deep and it's actually beyond my anaylising ability for the moment, it's intriuging and powerful in imagery, and it makes me feel the need to decipher the poem even if it feels partially obvious, it doesn't.

Are we talking about mans power? gods power? love? it feels dark and yet bright, and in that confusion i'll sit here and try to find meaning within it.

good poem, as you said about overuse of commas to me, i'm one for use of commas (Just general writing style i guess) and i prefer a poem with lots of grammar to create flow, just a suggestion which you really don't need to follow as the poem was well done.

A Remarkable work indeed ,with wise ideas. Powerful work.

Your Nickname attracted me and thank
God i read your work,coz i like it.

this was my fav. part:
A man of vibrant air
A female awarded of care

and i loved the A Ugly phrase,its
really special : )

much Respect,
Rua Francis.