Once again, it is a confusing kind of peom. It is hard to understand. I would give you some advise to put "more feeling" into your peoms. They are great in the content but the emotion in it is low.

~~Sarrah

thanks this is a confusing poem it was about a situation in my family with my sister and an incident that happened and i wasnt really there but i heard about it from everyone in my family and i wrote about it ill tell you mroe if you want me to just give me your email address or somthing but thanx