i wrote this after 9-11 right after

GOOD WRITING. PLEASE COME AND VOTE&COMMENT MY POEMS SOMEWTIME. THANKS
..XOXO..

Desiree~
I love the line "Love has come unhinged" very unique!
I think in the 3rd line you need to change has to have!
Also, in the 8th line "wined up dead" should be "wind up dead"!
You've got a lot of talent, just keep writing and you'll improve naturally! If you ever need any input, just e-mail me~Holly