I will fight for you...

by Sarah-Louise   Feb 12, 2005


I'm going insane,
All I feel is pain,
This is no longer a game,
My heart is to blame.

One look in your eyes,
My heart's mesmerized,
I'm floating the skies,
Please hear my cries.

Can't just be your friend,
You are my Godsend,
I will apprehend,
I will win in the end.

I'm stuck on you like glue,
Look what it's come to,
Whatever you do,
I'll fight for you,
I will fight for you.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    I don't like this one as much as your other poem, few little points that could make your flow a little better:

    'I'm going insane,
    All I feel is pain,
    This is no longer a game,
    My heart is to blame.'

    Try..

    'I'm going insane,
    All I feel is pain,
    No longer a game,
    My heart is to blame.'

    And..

    'I'm stuck on you like glue,
    Look what it's come to,
    Whatever you do,
    I'll fight for you,
    I will fight for you.'

    Try..

    'Stuck to you like glue,
    Look what it's come to,
    Whatever you do,
    I'll fight for you,
    I will fight for you.'

    ..Apart from those teeny weeny things, I think It's lovely. Short and sweet.

    Well done, take care of yourself.
    All my love,
    Laura.

  • 19 years ago

    by Jomar Bautista

    It was nice although short it really tells how one person feels. Great work!!!=)