by lorrie Feb 12, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
It was such a beautiful day out the sun was shining and it was going great for me. Until I arrived home from school. As usual i come home do my homework and wait for Charles to come home(my uncle who i live with). but he did not come home he called and said barb would be there to pick me up. well she came and we went out to eat and had a nice night. but the nice night ended when i got home to see you there and asked how uncle Jim was doing and you said he had died. i was furious how could you not call and tell me that my uncle just died. but then i realized you were looking out for me you did not want me to be alone and you wanted to be there to comfort me. well thank you. |
by Renee
this was very sad. Its a good thing to get these feelings out. It's great to write it all down and get it out of your mind so you dont dwell on it too much. But looking at it and the poem style, It would have been easier to read if it was in stanzas and if you organized it nicely and put in descriptive details. just thoughts, maybe for next time. Stay strong, and keep your uncle alive through your poems and you life. |