by Carmen Feb 13, 2005
category :
Friendship, family /
family
I talked to my little brother today, |
by Jamie
I loved the idea behind this it's really awesome to see you caring so much about your little brother i mean i would too but still its touching lol, im very glad that you got it to stop, i know what it's like to be bullied so yeah it's hard so good job. as for the poem the flow is choppy and sometimes you tried to rhyme words that just don't rhyme like anybody and moody and monsters and faster and there's a lot more, but yeah imma give this a 4/5 loved the idea lots, but your flow was choppy and the rhyming was off |
Very touching. I like your work. |
by -Erin-
Awww how sweet. |
by jencam
I adored the ending of this one! nice work! |
by Lyla
great, what else is there to say? You can really write! |