it's very expressive....I like it because i cannot relate to all of it....which kind of gives me a new outlook to most of these words; yet at the same time, the confusion in the writing and lack of constant flow makes it your own; makes it individual. This poem is truly yours, and only yours. I like it.

WOW that is an amazing poem! I love the imagery and the way its flows, it was beautiful!

-jenn

On that old deserted beach
Feet in the sand
Your holding my hand
And our hearts locked one with one

loved that bit sound like a good way to be nd sounds very mmmmm dreamyyyyy if only life was that simple 5

very good

I have to agree with No Motiv it's all urs exellent job very well written from the heart.