Think of this as constuctive criticism, i personally didin't get anything from thi spoem , htought it wa sbland and needed livening up, you don't have to have a ryhme and i think a poem like this would be better without it! Still thought it was good but needs improving!!
kt xx

yea i agree with tait...Maybe you should work on it lt more...but it was pretty good !!!!!! Take care,
E.