Usually I dislike this style of poems - where the rhyming structure is very obvious and it tells an average, sorrowful teenage story. But this is good. The repitition was captivating, and it was used very effectively to articulate this style of poetry. So for that, well done.

Hey hey! I love your poem and your rhyming! I wrote one somewaht like this too! I can relate. Good Job! Keep it up! Look into mine if you have time! Arrivederci!

I love it... i can picture this little kid pleading with her daddy to stop hurting the family... its so beautiful... love always janice xoxox

Amilo said that she usually dislikes this style of poems, and I feel the same way. She goes on to state that this poem is different. I think there is a degree of emotionalism that is this poem's saving grace, so to speak. I found the rhyme to be overbearingly straight forward. I'm not sure what you could do to change that, its just my opinion that this poem suffers a bit due to the rhyme scheme.