"He raped her often
And treated her like dirt
And now she’s pregnant
And with a baby boy or girl"
I thought this stanza was interesting because it doesn't follow the rhyme scheme of the rest of your poem. I thought that was neat, particularly if it was intentional. This poem was pretty good. The rhyme scheme wasn't terribly intrusive. My criticism lies in the fact that you spend numerous stanzas repeating variations on what seems to be close to the same information ( she is alone, sad, deserted, etc.) and all the while you "tell" the reader the information. In most of the writing classes I've taken, there is a lot of emphasis placed on "showing" the reader, not "telling" the reader.

I thought it was a really well written poem, alot of emotion :( it's really sad. The rhyme scheme was okay, but the content of the poem was superb. xxxx

I think it's good. 5/5*

i liked it, the ending was such a surprise!

-jenn

It was a very thought out poem i liked it very much...... i gave it a 5/5 great JOB!

your a very good poet

THANKS FOR ALL THE HELP GUYS.... especially for all the constructive critisisms!!
mwah