Love you? like you. wanting someone else?

by Noelle k.   Feb 19, 2005




i think i love you but i don't know .i always call you but now i find myself alone.

when you hold me i feel safe but when I'm not with you i feel like breaking.

when your near i feel scared but when your far away i feel like decaying.
confused.like.love. wanting another.

I'm wasting away slowly and your just watching me drown. i need to talk to you but you push me down to the ground.

I'm breaking in to pieces and shaking like a earthquake.

i think i love you... i know i like you.

can you love someone when you wonder how it would feel to be held by someone else?

to feel someone else's arms around you, to kiss someone else's lips?

to hear the words i love you said by someone else?

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  • 19 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    Not your best work, but i gave you a five for your efforts, it was a message with a strong poem, you just need abit more structure in some of your poems.

    Picture each sentence is a speech and different people are speaking those sentences outloud, you wouldn't want your 'speech' to be longer or shorter then the others. You would want them to be around the same, wouldn't you? that is the way poetry is, you can go over abit but don't go over too much, watch your beats and syllb. your definately a great poet with strong words to be said, your structure is what is holding you back i think...please don't take offense to this, i am merely trying to point out something that could make your poems really great.

    I think if you put more structure into them...poeple will definately start to notice, then again, i could be wrong.
    Either way i say it is worth giving a shot...well i have rambled on for long enough.

    Five/Five.

    P.S. Please don't take offense to me trying to help you out, i just want to see you become that amazing poet that i know is inside you.

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