very good, describes life and how it feels to play and lose.
*~*Soldier Lover*~*

please comment on my poems too!!! thanx lots

Very good poem.... keep them comin!

I loved your description and use of words it was so meaningful and emotional .. Awesome job, couldnt have done it better myself .. ! check out my poems if u get the chance id love to kno what you think .. thanks !
Love Ya ,
Maybeth !

hey failing at what???

i know all to well how that poem is.... it feels like no matter what i do... it seems like its not good enough no matter if its at school with my grades or things i do around the house. i feel like i try but i fail. great job

This is a great poem! I know exactly how you feel, I always feel like a failure at anything I do. It sucks...
Anyway, keep up the great work hun!

Don't forget to check out some of mine! ;)

Love,
Tiff

this is an excellent poem. i really like it and i can relate.

i like this because i feel i can relate...great work hun... your really taltented....Sherrie

Like it a lot because u say whats real. Keep on writing I like ur work! Check out mine if u can I am not very good but trying. lol

Hey, great poem, I know how you feel, and you hope you get happier soon.

Read my poems sometime.

-Michelle

great poem good job i really liked it.

I liked this one...a bit repetative towards the end which kind of let people know what was comming but other then that...nice job...luv yas mwah

-kayla-

eh i didnt really like this poem. it just didnt really flow to me. nothing really rhymed and i dunno 3/5

You painted a very nice clear picture of how your feeling! I liked it cause I can relate.... You might want to add maybe somthing more in depth about why your feeling this... Like give it a little more in depth look on this subject and it will be a awesome read!! Great work you are a great writter!

It really is a good poem, and I think most people will feel like that. I know I do pretty much at the moment. Makes me wonder, though, just what are you failing at or maybe that's just for readers to interperate.

But you see, you only fail when you give up and decide that you are done trying which is something you wouldn't do. You are too strong for that. Hold on for your life, as tight as you can, hold fast and hard because this is something worth fighting for with everything part of you being. This poem was definately an insight into you as a person which I enjoyed. I have loved to read your poems and hear your writer's voice flowing through the words.

-Tainted Mikochan