Hey, that was a beautiful poem, it was really great.

come read mine sometime!

Hei
Ja såg att du var från Finland, Sverige.
Själv är jag från Sverige =)
Väldigt bra dikt du har skrivit.
Du får en femma av mig!
Hade varit kul om du kollat mina dikter också..
Hei sitten!

/September Spring

wonderful poem. really amazing.

I liked this better than the other one. While the little "story" you've enclosed in this poem is lovely, it lacks a climax - sure, the "plot" moves every now and then, but it wasn't developed in that sense. The rhyme structure, I thought was a bit predictable at some parts, but the language use - especially in the first line - was attracting. So for that, it's fairly well done.

good write...very creative in the basis in wording...I myself am Sicilian Italian, are you by any chance Italian? just wonderin...
*~*Soldier Lover*~*

I enjoyed the tone of the poem, especially at the beginning. But the end felt almost as if you weren't completely sure how to finish it; felt rushed. I'd definitely make it a bit longer if you need to in order to say what you want to say. Regardless I did enjoy the poem.

Awwww... Wow... This is very lovely and passionate piece!! Amazing Work:) Keep it up, *5/5* all the way!! God Bless Your Heart!!! Ty for commenting, I appreciated it!!

-x-Sedusha-x-

Oh!!!! I just loved this one so much! lol. Very well well Written...Excellent.... A five.!

Love,

Libby

wow i really liked this poem. very unique content! and sweet how it ends happy! well done hope to read more of your work and would appreciate your comments on mine!
thanks
XxxLoUxxX

Good job!! 5/5 sweet!

much love
savannah

wow this was rly good i especially liked the last stanza its rly cute and beautifully written keep it up xxxxx

Thanks for reading my poem. I realy liked this one it was beautiful

another great poem..another five!

haha, yes im sure i wrote this poem! lol. i have the proof on my computer bcuz i save my poems so if you come for a visit i'll show you, *winks*