I wasn't sure weather to put this under "lost love" or about death. I know that it is one of my favorite poems that i have done. I really enjoyed writing this poem and i just couldn't stop writing things about it, i sat down one night and just began to write, i had the first two lines done and then the idea came about making it a father daughter relationship.

We all know there are not too many people who give thanks to their father, i thought i would show that in this poem. Let me know what you Think.

Thank you for your comments/and or votes on this poem, i really appreicate any input you have into this...and any comments you have about this poem.

Awe, I think about things like this, my dads in really poor health but every since he's had my sister, there's no room for me....my sister is the kid he always wanted...and I'm the poetic kid they'll never understand *sighs* your poem really made me think about what it would be like to watch him die knowing I never tried to resculpt the relationship...beautiful and defently one of your best, this sort of structure fits you wonderfully -5

love ya,
love Heather.

that was a really moving poem...i think it's really neat that you made it about a father/daughter relationship, not like all the other love poems about a boy and a girl...lol. but it really got me thinking what it'd be like if my dad died..were not so close cause he's an alchoholic and it makes me sad about stuff like him never reading me stories n all that...but i'd be even more sad if he died. i'm really glad i read this it helped me realize that. again...amazing poem >5/5<
xxxChristinaxxx

wow!! this poem is truly amazing! very sad yet wonderful written story. some of the sad stories i have read arent as good as this and not as emotionally involved connecting with the reader. but this one sure passes it off. great work!

and thank you from the bottom of my heart for all of the comments you have left me. your words really mean alot to me and i thank you soo much!

<33 andrea *hugs*

aawwww, that was really great, i got the chills, so keep on writin' =)

like all ur poems that one was really good....i liked it.....

oh wow... that was one of the sweetest poems i have ever read... you are such an incredable writer... your words flow so well, and you do push the rhymes.. they just happen... amazing job... i love your work

~*~oh my god...holy shit...wow i am like left speechless, i love those poems where you read expecting something and then it turns out way different, i was crying and then all of a sudden my hand was over my mouth and i was liek oh my effing god lol....but anywho..this poem was effing radical..keep up the good writing...spankumz for ur comment on mine, what did you mean by the stone thing though? did someone else already use that, cause ive never heard it before i was writing that in school today and just wrote words that cam to mind...yea i dunno if i wanna be a professional writeer, i dont think i have what it takes, other people do but i just dont..well anywho i am going to try and write a new one and should have it up soon...ttyl
jenna~*~

ace poem, well done its really effective

Jemma

WHAT WAS THAT !!!
Oh my God ! as i kept reading my tears were out !! What was that ???

i really dont know what to say !! is it great ? or terribly great writing ??? perfectly great ! you are a real passinate writer ,you are just Genius !

i loved th idea of ur story,i love it all,the most touching parts were:

they could hear the heart monitor's beep
his hand feel to the bed side and left her cheek

oh my god,soooooo sad : (

am so sorry ! i even forgot to tell you Hello ! u just shocked me with that poem!

Soo, Hello Darky mate : )
hope you are doing great,n hope to hear from you too.

you just enjoy your 5 (Excellent)

Peace
Darla

This is a beautiful piece of writing. *5/5*. Awesome
P.S please check out my poems too. please vote and comment . i will be glad to do the same for you.

Noziyna.

Awesome! Through the whole thing I thought it was a Boyfriend/Girlfriend or a Husband/Wife...The twist at the so it was a Father/Daughter was awesome. Good job. 5 from me.:)

thanks for your comment. i like this poem...its is very deep

Holy Crap Guy! Talk about your suprise ending! I loved it! Loved It! Loved It! 5/5 100x over man! Love your writing, keep it up!

ah that is a really moving poem made me all sad....well done though its a very well written one....keep it up

Nice poem I don't know what category I would have put that in either! Very nice work! Thanx for all ur nice thoughts as well.

wow deep. AWESOME POEM! I LOVE IT. 5 one of my fav poems. very sad but deep great work

~!~Noelle~!~

Darky

I Loved this quote:
You can't see the Sun-shine with
your head pointed to the ground."

its so Inspirational and Deep,meaningful !

i didnt know where to Comment
for that Quote,so i wrote it here : )

Cheers mate

Peace
Darla

beautiful story-poem. the twist was the perfect way to end that. to tell you the truth, i thought the beginning was slow at first but you totally grabbed me til the end. i liked it a lot. this was a great piece. take care:)