Very powerful indeed, the way you repeated the same line was effective. My fav. lines were...
'I had the most shameful dream last night
It showed me at my worst
In an angry and melancholy state of being
The evil blade dancing across my body'
Very powerful indeed. Keep it up xxx

thanks for comenting.. this is a most excellent poem.. makes my day.. it really does. cuz i have that dream too.

Nice

O..M..G! THAT WAS GOOD!

awesome loved it very creepy werird bit awesome. keep it up and thanks for commenting on mine. Have more check them out if you want