the flaws? ignoring any punctiational or spelling errors, I see a beautiful piece of work...thank you for the kind comment, I understand, "Take Me Away" wasn't writing as a turning to suicide, the last stanza was merely a symbolization but thanks anyhow hun. I really love your poem, 15 years ago, that would make you 9 when you wrote this if you're 24 as the profile states? I wouldn't find a 9 year old writing this however. lol...Nice job-5

Love Heather

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It was origionally written when I was nine, but I have modified a line or two every couple of years or so to try to "fix" it as I feel quite sentimental about this piece of work. Also, not everything I wrote at the time is of any quality lol, I just don't like to share the crap lol.
Ha ha, if you think writing this that young was weird, try this, at the same age I discovered Michael Crighton (however the hell you spell it) and had already finished reading The Andromega Strain as well as many other works lol. Not as impressive as say War and Peace and even though I understood probubly only two thirds of it, it still shows that age is not the only determining factor when considering skill with expression or a writing utensil. I am by no means very good, but when I was a kid, I was not too bad lol.