the short lines create more suspense...Great poem 5!

God bless
Love Heather.

Omg!! I loved this! I loved the style you used too! Amazing, Charlie! You did....omg......I LOVE it!! You're on my favorites!!

5/5

~Sierra

Wow, wow, wow. This is soooo great! I love it. I especially love the part
Heavier than concrete

I don't know why but that part stuck out to me...

You should check out some of mine, I think you would like my dark poems. Especially my newest one. I would appreciate it!
Keep it up!
Love,
Tiff