Thanks in advance for comments and advice.

~ nice to see you here after so much time, my friend. and nice poem. i don't have any title suggestion for this, but maybe others would suggest something good. nice write, keep writing!
~ take care, 5! always believe in love ~amit

Pretty good for your 2nd go ate non rhyming poetry. Focus on the emotion and diction, not flow and form.

thanks for the advice, i will definately keep that in mind. i wanna be a better writer.

That was great. You need to make it heart felt to touch the readers heart. Right fr. your heart and not w/ ur mind. I don't have any suggestions about the title you should figure it out to become much better. It was written well and honestly it is really good. Great work!!! 5/5 =)

Can u plz check my featured poem titled My Story thanks a lot!!! =)

hmmm... not sure for a title, for ur second non-rhyming attempt i thought it was realy good, keep it up xxx

good job for only your second attempt well done i dont have a title suggestion but i liked it x x x take care x x x

Great poem CinnamonTwirl!
5 stars for this one..
Please check out my poems.
Tkae Care