this is a lovely descriptive piece:) but i think it ought to be this wasn't 'meant' to be and not 'mend'
take care

This was okay. If you established one rhyme scheme like abcb or aabb or something like that it would flow better... because you have a lot of rhyme schemes going on. The rhyme scheme of this poem is abaccdeffgg... They will flow a lot better if you establish a rhyme scheme. It was a good poem. Keep writing!

good poem but you have better poems.. keep it up.

good job! 5/5
Take Care,
Paulette

Well done.
Good poem
I agree about the rhyme scheme but who cares
Still a great read xxx

really nice 5/5

Awesome poem. Congrats! A 5/5 from me :)

i loved this one

great poem

ps.thanks for the comment

great poem!!! keep it up!! :) take care.

sweet sad poem loved it :D

Jacs
xxx

I especially liked the first lines...they were somehow very touching. I must say that this poem was very beautiful but sad too. Keep writing, take care.
Satuxxa