Hey, thats really good. I can't even right something so good in a short way. Mine are long azz shiblits that you could nit to. Great job.

short put very well put.

~PLP~ lil slam~ it deserves a batter rating then 2.8!

it was great to make a poem about this. but for some reason it just seemed like you were mocking it. I dont know why, it just did. I know you probably werent, thats just how I read it. Maybe go in to depth a little more about how it changed your life and how you felt about it.

Take Care,
Renee

Short but straight to the point. Nicely put, efficient, very strong emotions, it almost imitates the quickness in which the tragedy happened. Well done!