Hi..
Ive run all of ur writings.
I think youve got your own style and potential..
Try some rhythm and stanzas.
Im sure it wouldl be better.
;)
Keep on writing.

OMG. This happened to me. My man moved to Chicago and i didnt know wut to do. Its been 5 months he is back to visit for 4 days and wow im happpy we are still together. I its true when you are in love youll do anything to make it work. Great poem.