I feel a little lost because there's nothing to grasp other than trying to forget. Because that isn't commented on it's like you're getting hammered just because.

As usual it is well written, but I feel it could use depth to make it complete.

Bert

Damn, you're a harsh voter ;)

Pretty much trying to forget is all its about. I see what you mean, I'll probably go back and edit through it to make it more multi dimensional.

The message in the poem, or the deeper meaning, however, is in the last stanza:

A few more
Shots of gold, to burn
Only to check out,

Then return.

It is all in the "Then return," because you can only escape temporarily, which is what is being striven for throughout the poem in its entirety.

Yep, I got that completely and it's a pretty damned good end too. And I'm harsh cause you you'd expect nothing less. You don't want me fluffing your pillows and tucking you in at night, you want me to help you improve, right ;)

lol, I got you totally.

I've probably got too many people fluffing my pillow already, yes?

Although I wouldnt mind you tucking me in at night ;) *grin*

You have a lovely talent for putting into poetry most would be to shy to mention. I simply love you're style, exotic and forward.