Not everyone can see,
What I can see,
Not everyone’s vision,
Is as clear as me

Grammatically it should be mine not me in the 4th line and so it feels a bit clunky. But with two sees you could change the rhyme form to suit 'mine'. There are plenty of rhyming worlds to keep the message of this stanza clear.

Nice, I like it.

I have a feeling you are going to be a pain in my butt about this poetry stuff #$^%^# ;)

Anyway, I'll go back through and tune it up. I know it wasnt perfect, it kind of distracts people from the poem where there are grammatical errors.

Basically, yes. But I expect nothing less by way of return.

Good, I'll give you nothing less :)

Wow, this poem blew me away, its concept is *clear* lol I don't know what to say, its amazing
Simply Yours,
Lauren

wow it realli made me think about a lot. keep up the great work!