I like the interesting vocabulary and the fact that the poem isn't melodramatically "hammed up." Keep it up :)

Take care,
Karen
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thanks for ur comment....i wrote it cos one o my mates cousins has just died and i wanted to do something to commemorate it even tho its not much! thanks for ur comment xxx

I really like it :) very touching!

very selfless and caring, another great poem. flows well as always.

take care, lu -x-x-x-

Thank you all, Lou xxx

Wow, see that's what i like to read, i think relating poetry with the nature is the most beautiful way to express true emotion. And you do it so well! I believe the ones i did that are most like these are heavens perfect sonnet and weather patterns. keep up the good work, much love, johnny