This is about having a full on emotional talk with someone you care about deeply...and being scared to say what you really feel for fear or hurting the other person....and how evertually that fear pushes the interaction down the same weak asses path as every other one.

Kevin,

This is really good. I cannot say how often I have been on this path myself. It seems as though you were talking directly to me and expressing my feelings when you stated

"I sit numb and just staring
oblivious
to points of hammer"

It seems as though everyone has been in this psoition at one point or time in their life..

Take Care
And keep writing

--Sher

Well, the theme of this poem is still a little curious to me, I might go back and read it again...
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Great metaphors, truly, this poem shows those who beleive that love poems WILL be repetative, that one CAN write a difference and highly unique piece of art.
Well done!

After reading the comment you wrote about WHAT this is about, I now get it... lol, maybe I should've read your comments first ;)

Last night I was at a performance of Laurie Anderson, the performance artist (not sure if you're familiar with her, but she's fantastic IMHO).

She commented that you never stammer at the end of a word because by then it's too late; the fear is at the beginning, but after the start, you're committed. Your poem just made me think of that....

I like the way that this has been written and it shows that you do not always need to write a long poem to get the meaning across. Great job! Love Emma xxx

It is short and quite sweet. Your fluency is well done and different than the rythym you find in most poems. Crisp and Fresh ^_^ I do plan on reading more of your work.

This is great Kevin i love...precious tongues well past silver... 5/5

this was a beautiful poem, i loved it. sorry about the stupid people post topic in the forum, i didnt know people would get so off topic. :D well, i loved this poem. keep writing!! i could never compare to this. i wish i could. adios! nancy

Doze r sum deep poetick wordz yuz got thar

You know you write cryptic and intellectual, while cryptic is nice, but in my view I find love poems to be better if they show some love, this was too "steely" for me.

Very good poem! love it
Please keep writing :-)
I enjoy your poetry

Danielle
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