Very well written, I liked how each lines rolled together with rhyming words that seemed so natural.
Great metaphors with a lovely little display.
Though I did get a bit confused... are you trying to tell it from a perspective of the hurt or dying? Or from the perspective of God creating a disaster? Or both? Or am I completely wrong?
Well, it may just be because it's late and I'm tired.

But I still loved it, it was a great, easy read.

Thanks alot, I wrote this a couple of months ago, but only the first 2 and a half verses...I originally wanted to make this like an epic tale, but I got impatient and forgot about it till last week and then just wrapped it up. It was supposed to be a story about an unbelieveable force or demon that was manifested by the anguish of one person, which was released on his death to flood everything and everyone with its malevolence....but I got bored, lost perspective and just finished it quickly