Free

by Kaitlin Kristina   Mar 11, 2005


Kill me now,
Or set me free.
I’ll die here if you don’t.
You see?
Hold me for your selfish ways
Hindsight that leads to stoical days

Release me,
Unchain me,
Let me fly.
You can never have me
If my soul does die.

Suffer, angst, tears,
Unrequited,
Unreciprocated,
Left divided.

Ubiquitous,
To you,
My essence does seem.
But if you let me go,
Chase my dream,
My essence will always stay the same,
And in your heart,
I will stay as tame;

But hold me here,
So self-seeking,
Yet don’t understand,
It’s self-defeating.

A double negative,
That stems from greed,
To hold me here,
Is to sow the seed,
To smother me,
Day after day,
Incessant capture,
Age and decay,
Water me now,
With jealousy,
Diffidence.

And now I must say,
In my defense,
That if you let me go,
If you love me that much,
If you can bring yourself to that point of trust,
That I won’t disappoint,
That I’ll accomplish my dream,
But if you don’t let me go.

It rips at its seam.

Comments are always nice :) Thank you.

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  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    Magnifique! Wonderful jaunt through an eloquent, enlightened plead to an unconscionable denial in ignorance.

  • 19 years ago

    by Kaitlin Kristina

    The punctuation adds the adequate pause I want, it is a slow read, and spacing alone does not create the timing I want.

    And the awkward phrasing gives it a unique feel, I want people to have to think about what I am saying, not just accept it as everyday language.

    Thank you though :)

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "Hindsight that leads to stoical days"
    you could use the more common adj "stoic" instead of "stoical," but both work.

    "You can never have me
    If my soul does die."
    I feel like you could have made the last line end more like "if my soul dies." I think the does is there as a away to aid the rhythm, but it doesn't really need to be there.

    I especially liked the second to last stanza, but I agree with bob that in this case, you could afford to lose at least a few, if not all, of the punctuation marks (esp. some commas).

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