by ShadowedPhoenix Mar 11, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
I’m broken down, |
by pseudo
Great Poem!!! I really like the choice of your title ;) I agree that kids can be really cruel sometimes.. and it all just doesnt make sense because you've done anything to them.. this poem really showed the feelings and emotions of someone whos tired of being ridculed [im sorry this true] but i can relate to this.. although it doesnt happen as often.. amazing poem keep it up =) |
by Robert
you seem to take the position of a victem here. Saddly I see this alot in here. I would do this poem with abit more sarcasim and alot more fight. It was a ok poem but rather gutless in a way. Read Turn around or even set free. You will see how I would approach the same pain. Take care |
by AJ
its really good and tells a story... ~keep it up~ |
by Rocky
wow this one i really like i can relate 5/5. Good job in writing this one |
by Danny
You'll really have to prove that you write bad poems as i still find it hard to believe, brilliant again |